Posted on July 13, 2010, 12:33 pm, by VFM Leonardo.
2 Comments
David Attardi says:
July 13,
2010 at 3:22 pm
Overall, I like the
video. Although I’m not really sure what it’s
about. Text titles throughout the video might
help with that and make the storyline more
cohesive and complete. It could be a little
shorter as well.
Jahn McAuliffesays:
July 13, 2010 at 3:37 pm
I like the time
capture footage. It’s very in and current these
days so your use of it at the beginning is nice.
A few of
suggestions:
• It is too long
and the music makes it seem even longer. You
would be well served to segment the video into
shorter, relevant stories – the spa, the
vineyard and oenophile interests, etc.
• What does the hotel actually look like? The
camera angles are interesting but I think they
get in the way of letting me know what the hotel
looks like and has available for me –
accommodations, etc.
• Why are the two girls sunbathing in house
coats? I also am not sure that the pool in the
middle of the vineyard is the way I would show
that – perhaps someone swimming in a tighter
cropped view.
David Attardi says:
July 13, 2010 at 3:22 pm
Overall, I like the video. Although I’m not really sure what it’s about. Text titles throughout the video might help with that and make the storyline more cohesive and complete. It could be a little shorter as well.
Jahn McAuliffe says:
July 13, 2010 at 3:37 pm
I like the time capture footage. It’s very in and current these days so your use of it at the beginning is nice.
A few of suggestions:
• It is too long and the music makes it seem even longer. You would be well served to segment the video into shorter, relevant stories – the spa, the vineyard and oenophile interests, etc.
• What does the hotel actually look like? The camera angles are interesting but I think they get in the way of letting me know what the hotel looks like and has available for me – accommodations, etc.
• Why are the two girls sunbathing in house coats? I also am not sure that the pool in the middle of the vineyard is the way I would show that – perhaps someone swimming in a tighter cropped view.